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monday said that you loved me.

he whispered this through broken teeth
and touched me with hands that were
crackled, like boiled eggs.

tuesday stole you.
her eyelashes batted too slowly
and i saw you leave,

but wednesday
brought you back to my door-
meek, wet, and disheveled,
clutching wilted roses.

thursday, ever tricky,
hid you in the orange grove with a lady
and no amount of april fools could convince me to stay.

friday let me cry at her bosom,
she stroked my hair and murmured lullabies
into tangled silk.

saturday was kind and gentle.
'fear not,' he said, and patted my hand.
'he will return.'
you did. saturday dragged you home
and draped you over our lovestained couch.


sunday was the meanest day.
he gave me bruises and whiskey-tinted kisses
all up my neck.
i was packed to leave,
but then

monday said that you loved me.
he whispered this through punched-out teeth
and touched me with hands that were
tainted, like last week's garbage,


so tuesday told me
"it's time to leave."

and wednesday, thursday, friday, and saturday
wished me luck on sunday as i boarded the train,
and the bruises on my neck were enough to hush her when


monday said that you loved me
(again).
My goodness... How depressing.

Just a quick submission before I leave you all. I'll be gone for most of tomorrow. :/
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Unwritten-Memories Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This was absolutely beautiful. It really touched me. It was full of emotion, depth, and meaning. It flowed perfectly. Just beautiful. <3
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012
My, what a lovely comment... :love: Thank you so much! :heart:
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KittyAilla Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012
Oh, it's amazing:) You write wonderfully:)
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012
Thank you so much, my dear! :heart: I'm glad you liked it. :)
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FaithHopeAndLOVE Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Student General Artist
Such succint poetic energy :clap:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012
Thank you. :heart: You are wonderful. :)
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FaithHopeAndLOVE Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Student General Artist
You are beautiful in every way : )
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012
And YOU are beautiful in every way... times two. :giggle: Thank you... :happycry:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
I just love you.:heart:
You're one of the most amazing creatures that have ever lived.:faint:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012
Goodness, darling... :tighthug: With a comment like that, I'll be glowing all day! :heart: I love you too, my dear. And if you insist that I am amazing, I'll say to you it's all because of the people I surround myself with. ;) You are a beautiful person. :heart:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012
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MandyMullins2 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012
Tis quite depressing...but it's still beautiful! :love:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012
Ha, yeah... :XD: But thank you! :la:
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MandyMullins2 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012
You're welcome! :D
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LittleMayniac Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, the melancholy! I like how the feeling gets more and more desparate, as the days go by. Time may be the best healer, but it can also scar you more as it passes by. Great poem! :love:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012
Yeah... When they say that time heals wounds, they fail to mention that sometimes time creates them. Thank you! :D
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LittleMayniac Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :)
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
so tuesday told me
"it's time to leave."

and wednesday, thursday, friday, and saturday
wished me luck on sunday as i boarded the train,
and the bruises on my neck were enough to hush her when

monday said that you loved me
(again).


Yes. YES. Because this--this right here, these words, these emotions, all of this--is how it goes sometimes. And you've portrayed it so beautifully--the hopes. The dreams. The crushing of fragile hearts. The doubts. The constant repetition.

Gorgeous work on this. Absolutely gorgeous.
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012
Thank you so much, my dear. I'm very happy that you liked it, and your comment was actually detailed! ;P Thank you so, so much... :heart:
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You are very welcome. :heart:
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KitKax Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
God, do I love your writing.
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012
God, do I love your comments. :tighthug:
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KitKax Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahaha :love:
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WalkingWithBarefeet Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This. Is....so amazing!! :heart: it is quite sad, but it's extremely beautiful in all it's melancholic glory :love: You have an amamaaazing gift, I know I've said before, but I only say it because it is so completely true! :hug:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012
Thank you, darling! :tighthug: Goodness, you make me blush... :giggle: I'm so glad that you enjoyed it. :la:
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WalkingWithBarefeet Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad darling!! :giggle: I'm so glad you enjoyed my comment heehee :huggle:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012
I ALWAYS enjoy your comments! :giggle:
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WalkingWithBarefeet Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I ALWAYS enjoy...your......EMOTICONS!!!! (I dunno, I just wanted to say something to the same effect....I was going to say I always enjoy your face, but I've never actually seen you in real life, soooooo.... :XD: )
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012
You liek theeese? :giggle::lol::tighthug::heart::hug::squee::meow::love::lol:
Mah sexeh emoticons, you cannot resist da powah! :la:
I say random stuff like that all the time in real... :lol:
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WalkingWithBarefeet Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:lmao: NUUUU I've been ensnared in da powah of your sexeh emoticons!! :crazy:
That's because you're freakin awesome... :D
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012
:iconhurrhurrplz:
:iconmonroeplz: <-- *is ensnaring you* :XD:
LIEEEEESSSSSS! :giggle:
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