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she was a stormcloud, and you loved her,
and the two of you took walks and wore
nothing but promises,
broken chains and
strands of pinkish pearls.

and the two of you kissed under trees that attracted silver lightning
(metal branches scraped the sky, and you, always faithful,
tipped your coat over her head to keep her dry.)

but she never stayed that way.
in an instant, she had whirled into the rain
and danced without clothes,
without cares,

without you.

and she left you
with the pain of frostbite on your naked skin
where you trusted her to kiss you warm,
and you thought you heard her laughter
when the sun came out again the next day,

and the next.

but
she was a stormcloud, and you loved her,
and you didn't know it at the time but

stormclouds lie
(and they never
love you
back. )
...

Not revised, due to inability to focus for long periods of time. I hope this is readable. :X
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Blonde922 Jun 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
great poem
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Holy crap man.. 0_0 oh my goodness Cay, this is legit one of the best things I've ever seen you write.. I am astounded, seriously, my mouth kinda hung open for a minute.. wow, you wrote this beautifully and gave me such imagery.. i'm tempted to sketch something to this.. wowww.. :)
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:iconmercury-the-queen:
Oh... :blush: Really? Um, thanks... :giggle: (I'm kind of speechless, if you can't tell... =P) I'm really glad you liked this, and I'd be thrilled if you DID sketch something to it... :la: You don't have to, though. ;P Oh, but thank you so much for the grin-inducing comment. :tighthug:
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:iconblonde922:
Blonde922 Jun 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Really a great poem
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:iconmercury-the-queen:
Thank you so much. :D
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RiseandBe Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Fantastic!
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Rair15 Jun 5, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love this part: "stormclouds lie (and they never love you back.)" awesome! :P
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:iconmercury-the-queen:
Oooh, thank you! I'm glad you liked that part. :la:
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