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my friends were
snips and snails and puppy dog tails
or
sugar and spice and everything nice.

i was the space between the words:
"girls on one side;
boys on the other."  
rainbows and pails and sugar-snails,
that's what genderqueers are made of.
I hope you like it. I've been toying with this concept for a while, but I'm not sure I did it justice... The last line was hard to get right because "that's what genderqueer is made of" sounded better than "that's what genderqueers are made of," but I decided on the latter because it was closer to the wording of the original saying.
Should I change it back to the first one?
I like the idea of "sugar-snails." :giggle:


This is dedicated to someone who knows who they are. :heart:
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salmonandcapers Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this was beautifully constructed
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013
Thank you! :)
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Aaron-Jay Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
makes you think huh. :O It's a very thought provoking poem on the fine line between femininity and masculinity and those who stand on that line and refuse to move to either side. Wonderful piece, my dear. wonderful piece. :D
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
I'm glad you enjoyed it. ;) Thank you so much.
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Aaron-Jay Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
no.no.no. You shouldn't be thanking me. We all should be thanking you for making such a wonderful piece of poetry. :D
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
... but here I go, thanking you again. ;) Thank you, my lovely. :tighthug: You really are too kind. :D
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Aaron-Jay Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
but you keep thanking me. :O I think that's very mannerly and is the definition of a kindly mannered person. You have class by thanking someone. Although, personally, I feel we all should be thanking you... you're classy enough to come back to us and thank us in the end. :D:D:D
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
But how can I not thank you? You took the time to read my poem, and not only that but the time to comment on it as well. :D And I appreciate that very much. ;)
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Aaron-Jay Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you have a point there! :O *nods head in the affirmative* but I still will stick to my guns and say thank you to you for making such wonderful art. ^_^:D:D
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012
:iconohuplz: ;P

Well then, I'll just say "you're welcome." ;)
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Galialay Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful :huggle:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
Thank you~ :heart:
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kyotogirl13 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012
Beautiful. Just puts it really well, and I really feel it.
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012
Thank you, darling. :heart: I'm so glad you like it. :)
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CookieCremes Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012
This is so adorable, I almost died :3
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
Haha, thank you! :la:
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K-Chan14 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow- I'm at a loss of words c:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012
:giggle: Thank you...
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AnnaChesnut Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2012
Aww this is really good!!!
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:iconmercury-the-queen:
Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2012
Thank you! :tighthug:
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Vii06 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I love this so much...
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012
I'm so glad. :heart:
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ReinventReinvigorate Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is a lovely thought expressed elegantly and sweetly, I like it a lot. There's actually something really appropriate about the elementary-school imagery, considering how simplistic a child's view of gender is (and how childish a simple person's view is
Likely to stay).
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
Thank you! I made this simple on purpose- as a play on the old "snips and snails" gender sayings -but I hadn't thought about the childish thoughts that older people still have about things like that. You're absolutely right! :D
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KasdeyaWolf Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
thank you for writing such an amazing description.... wonderful poetry about a minority that few recognise.
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
You are so welcome. Thank YOU for reading it. :heart:
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:iconroger-the-elfin-soul:
A pailful of rainbows. :iconrainbowmegustaplz: Pour it out right on my head! :D
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
*splashes you with rainbows* Now you are literally rainbowesome! :D
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:iconroger-the-elfin-soul:
*Rainbows trickling down me in sticky streams* Oh my, ME GUSTA!! :iconohohoplz: I'm such a pervy sometimes :XD:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
*pulls out a rainbow-spraying garden hose* All right, kid. You asked for it! *turns on the hose* MUH HA HA HA!
Aren't we all? :giggle:
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:iconroger-the-elfin-soul:
:iconkillitwithfireplz: :iconkillitwithfire: Dat way, only with rainbowz? :XD:

Ohhhh... :giggle:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
Exactly like that. :giggle:
YUS. =P
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:iconroger-the-elfin-soul:
:iconicameplz: Now that's the right kind of thing :giggle:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
:iconicamerainbowsplz: <-- No, THAT'S the right kind of thing. :XD:
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canyoudothefandango Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
:clap: Sugar Snails :XD:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
I would love to see one. :D
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WalkingWithBarefeet Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like it plural, mainly because that way it refers to all of them, not just a single...though I know you mean the group but yeah...haha anyways, that was confusing, but even though the singular sounds better, I think the plural fits better (: Good job, my friend, I really like this one. Gives a look-see at the other groups :huggle:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012
I see. :lol: Thank you! :tighthug:
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samwinchester14 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
*gasp* Powerpuff Girls!!! I recognize the snips, snails and puppy dog tails and the sugar, spice and everything nice!!! :D :highfive: (I'm assuming/hoping that that's where you got it from. If not, I look kinda stupid... haha) I love this poem so much!!! :) and yes, I think you should leave 'genderqueers' plural.
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012
Yus! :XD: Yes, that is where I got it from. :giggle: I'm so glad you like it! Thank you! :D
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw, I DO love this. Perfect, ma cherie! I do like it the way it is.
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012
I'm so glad you like it. :tighthug: I think I like it the way it is, too. Thank you so much! :D
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it, I do! Bravo! You're so VERY welcome.
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MandyMullins2 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012
Sugar snails...sounds like some pretty sweet snails :D.
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012
Indeedy. I should draw some... :XD:
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MandyMullins2 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012
Do it! :D
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
I think I will! :D
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MandyMullins2 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
:squee:
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xscarcrowx Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012
Leave it plural.
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:iconmercury-the-queen:
Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012
Thank you. :)
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